First Interlude!

Seeding 1.X is live! The Roman interlude!

First interlude and first villain chapter. Also, lots of relevant OCs and a very big change to a couple known characters. Let me know what you guys think, cuz I’m fuckin terrified!

Enjoy!

A response to a review

Hey guys. This might be a little weird, but I wanted to post a review I got on fanfic here that brings up a couple of things that I myself have some issues with when it comes to my story and give my response and thoughts to some things in it.

” I realy love storys that focus on how bad weiss actualy had it. I doubly love it when her team helps her become a better person. So yours definitly catches my fancy. Sadly there are some things that realy take me out of the story.

Firstly is Rubys character. Now im pretty sure that i understand what youre trying to do. Ruby is often shown as a little bit of a clutz and airhead and i agree with that mostly. What i dont agree with is when its played up to extreme degrees. Reading your story i sometimes feel like im reading about an 8 year old instead of a skilled but arkward 15 year old thats somewhat naive.

Now that isnt a constant. There are scenes where ruby seems like the social akward young leader she is in canon, but mostly i feel like you actualy want me to think shes an idiot. dont get me wrong i dont get the feeling youre delibirately trying to bash ruby or anything. Quite the opposite acutaly. But overall i feel like, as i said, im reading about a mutch younger child here.

Secondly is blake. Now the way blake acts here is in itself not wrong. She is at the end of the day a good person that wants to help others. The problem i have here is the timing. Blake came to beacon after running from anything she knew. The friend (or more or more im not sure its ever clearly stated if the 2 had a romantic relationship ) she followed for years and the mission to better the life of faunus aroudn the world. Thats all gone for her. And while i never believed that she ever realy hated weiss, she was clearly guarded and cautious around anyone. Later in the story, around volume 3 and now at the end of 6, the way blake acts here works perfectly. We are at the very beginning where blake knows nothing about her team and i think, while she wouldnt ignore weiss or not care at all, she seems way to supportive to me.

Thats brings me to the main problem i have. Time. I know time in itself is already an abstract concept. Even more so in a story where the passige of time is already abigious at best. And reading these chapters in one go, the way the characters progress isnt unrealistic expect for the things i already alked about. But if you think about how little time in universe passed, the speed of it all almost breaks my neck. They known each other for less then 4 days at this point if im not mistaken and the stuff that happens just need at least a few weeks if not month to progress like this. As i said time is difficult in storys, more so while writing since what happens does not directly translates into time passed. But i think its so extreme here that it actualy makes me stop and think ” how does this all happen so fast”.

After writing all this i want to make clear that a) this is my opinion and how i feel while reading your story. Its not fact nor do i think im some sort of expert or anything. Its just something that bothered me. And b) i do enjoy this story. if i think its bad or anything i would never take the time to write all this nor do i write reviews or comments just to talk down on someone. Aside that i myself never wrote a story and as such am in no position to think i know better, i also would never want to discorage someone from there storys.

I do look forward to more chapters and hope nothing i wrote is taken as an insult. “


Okay, so to address these points in order:

I am aware that Ruby’s character seems a bit too childish/ditzy. This was a conscious decision on my part (whether it was the right one or not, idk, but it was on purpose) to make her more fallible. In the show she is basically the perfect character–not a Mary Sue in power level, but someone with a more or less “perfect personality”. She’s adorkably awkward, funny, sweet, heroic, brave, strong, etc., etc. She spends a couple of the early episodes being a little bit of a whiny child, and then that’s it. She’s now perfect.

So here I wanted to do it a bit differently, make her a bit more immature, so that she can grow–with the influence of Weiss in particular–into the character as we know her now. One thing I wish the show had done differently is that we see Weiss change a bit from just being with her team, but Ruby, Blake, and Yang’s character development are all solely driven by the plot and not the characters around them. So here I want to Ruby to change more from Weiss, and later Blake. (Right now, she doesn’t really react to things like racism, bullying, etc. all that appropriately, thinking that the person being “mean” just needs a hug and they’ll be nice because she doesn’t really know any better. After learning more of Blake’s story, she’s going to be more ready and willing to fight the bad guys.)

Also, the reason it comes across like Ruby is a bit of an idiot is because both of the characters whose perspectives we’re sharing think she’s a bit of an idiot–yes, including Ruby. We as a society have developed a culture of quantifying intelligence through grades, which encourages the use and development of rote memorization and formulaic thinking, two things (my) Ruby is bad at. But once we get into combat situations, Ruby’s ability to improvise quickly to solve dynamic problems will get to shine. Those just aren’t abilities that are easily quantifiable or easy to observe, so she and others don’t give her credit for that kind of intelligence.

I also have very specific flaws in mind for each character, and one of Ruby’s is her immaturity and how she doesn’t have realistic expectations of being a huntress. In her head, it’s all fairy tales and super heroes, and she’s yet to be exposed to and come to terms with the harsh reality of the job and the seriousness it demands (which was why she didn’t know how to react to or think about the news of Winter and Nidas’ teams dying).

Oof. Sorry. Moving on.

Blake.

Yes, Blake here is very different. To be perfectly honest, I just couldn’t fucking stand Blake for the first four and a half seasons and wanted to do something different with her. I especially hate V1 and 2 Blake. She basically just paced around in circles and whined about how edgy she was[n’t]. I didn’t want to do that here. Idk. Maybe that’s a mistake. I just wouldn’t have enjoyed writing her at all if I’d made her like she was in the show.

As for her and Weiss, that one moment of showing support isn’t going to be indicative of a consistent behavioural pattern. It was mostly just a result of her seeing how vicious Yang was in that moment and how hurt Weiss was, and feeling obligated to try to help her teammate. It was also an opportunity for me to start developing the Weiss/Blake friendship early so that the “surprise, I have cat ears” reveal is more jarring for Weiss later on.

Which brings me to the final point:

Time.

I have no defense here. This is actually an issue I’m acutely aware of and have been berating myself for for weeks. I’m just a bad writer.

Yes, their relationships are developing way too quickly. It’s hella hard to reconcile the fact that it’s only been a few days for them but I’ve been writing for 10-11ish weeks. I also didn’t like writing the issues/flaws without presenting the development of resolution, even though realistically and logically that resolution should be a long way off. And now I feel like if I slow things down it will feel like character stagnation.

Idk. I don’t know what to say except I’m sorry and I should have done this better.

Thank you for the thorough review, Alucard. I appreciate the candidness and I actually agree with many of your points. The issues you have with Ruby were intentional on my part, though that doesn’t mean it was the right decision, and I may need to look at changing it. I’m also really glad you like the story and care so much! :3 ❤

Sorry for the wall of text everyone. I hope this offered some insight into how I write and what I’m trying to do with this story.

Wow

Got a personal record in views on fanfic.net yesterday. 718. Wow. That’s kinda nuts.

I’m really pleased with how people have been liking my dialogue and character interactions. I’ve been low-key hating everything I write because I feel like I’m making the relationships progress too fast, but if people are enjoying it then I guess that matters more? Or at least counts for something.

Gonna be writing combat for the first time in a couple weeks, and I’m hoping I do it as well as I’ve been doing dialogue. And then after THAT I’m doing a villain interlude, and I have no idea how that’s going to go. I still need to decide which interlude I’m even doing: torn between writing a Watts chapter that will be kinda hella hard cuz I dunno how well I can write someone that’s cracked in the head and a Roman chapter that I’m just not sure exactly what I want to happen.

Ugh.

But hey, 718 views. PogChamp.

Chapter 1.12 is out!

So I just posted the new chapter, Seeding 1.12. A couple more chapters to go to get to the end of the school week, then an interlude! It will likely be from Roman’s perspective. After that, Arc 1 will be done and we’ll move on to Arc 2 – Thaw. It’ll start with the Saturday shopping trip of wholesomeness :3

Hope you guys enjoy the read!

A response to dol3jrut

Yes, the idea was a .22 Magnum. Apparently I just vastly underestimated the stopping power of a .50 BMG. The problem is I want bullets to actually be a threat to our lil’ huntresses, and 20 shots from a .22 being needed to take out Weiss already seems like a lot…. Also, it was not my intention to imply Ruby sucks at math in the last chapter. She just doesn’t know how the calculations for affinity work, as she’s never done this before. She basically just saw all the numbers Weiss wrote down and didn’t know the formula that was used to get them.

Also, Ruby’s Aura doesn’t constantly get drained while in her semblance. She “spends” Aura in three scenarios–when she gets hit in Rose Form, as she has to replace the Aura of her outline in the real world, when she burns Aura to empower her movement (speeding up, flying, etc), and when she comes back out of Rose Form, when she pops back in and burns off the Aura that was her outline, essentially. Summer was similar–she could spend Aura to increase the burst when she went into the Rose World so the petals she left in the real world would scatter faster, and then she’d spend Aura reconstructing herself on one of the petals, as long as she has enough… Honestly, Ruby doesn’t know what happens if she runs out of Aura while in Rose Form (I do, but I’m not saying :P), as she never has, but she doesn’t want to risk getting stuck on the other side.

Affinity Tests

So it seems I portrayed the affinity test in Ch 1.11 as something exclusive to Professor Rustheart, as some people have said “Fookin’ Beacon teachers, m8” (paraphrasing here). I just want to make clear that the “shooting people with Dust rounds” thing is the standard method of doing an affinity test. I had hoped I made that clear through Weiss thinking about how unpleasant the tests were, and by the way the professor and students were all talking about them like they knew what was going on.

It was honestly just the best way of testing I could think of. The issue mostly comes from everybody having different amounts of Aura (something canon that is established in the show). You have to figure out how much Aura a huntsman has–the first three regular bullets serve that purpose–and then measure the Dust damage as a percentage of their total Aura. This was the best way I could think to do that.

Sorry if I gave the wrong impression about the test. It wasn’t just Professor Rustheart being whacky.